Inspired by Bruno San Filippino's Intropassion

Dawn breaks I am dreaming still. The echoes sound and reverberate.

Softer first than the first sounds of an early bird, they mount the hill

and perch on the rock until the sunrise breaks through the clouds

A dawn breaks, on the hill, the horizon, and the sea.

A sound takes wings.

A flight on the wind, an upward swing,

and upward to the sky.

Light are the wings, and light is the sky,

light is the dream that brings in the dawn

to diffuse the air with a heavenly sound of the dawn.

I am breathing fresh, a June midnight and an August morn.

A peacock's plume shaken by the raindrops

lets fall a shower of ecstasy.

An anguish a moment ago,

you sent a word to not feel sad

and the dawn is a messenger, a herald of peace.

Sushama Karnik

• Reading the poem while listening to the music is bliss.

  I like the present narrative used as it emphasizes the effect of immediate sensations that the music evokes and prints on the mind: you live the moment fully, you are the present but also the past ( "a June midnight and an August morn").

  The last stanza, introducing a hint of the past opens the reading and listening towards a peaceful perception of the future.

  Beautiful!

  In a few lines, the poem, inspired by the rhythm of the music, has moved along the eternal present of existence, like emphasizing a siamese complicity between eternity and the existing moment.

  Musical time is a time in which narrative time can be constructed: the melody of a piece of music, like the melody of a poem when read aloud, makes us aware of the ephemeral and the permanent, of becoming and of being, of the linearity of life.

  I could feel this in your poem.

  

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  Sushama Karnik

  You rightly observed how the effect of the immediacy of musical sensations of piano is of vital importance.

  

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