The Wind
The wind rushed in, The window knocked the wall out.
The curtains blew and flew away.
Your hair was a wild forest of summer
and your face needed no veil to hide.
hugged you anxiously.
And I read your name from the last to the fore
and made a discovery who you were in the past!
Sushama
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Françoise Dhulesia
These lines of yours are to me the per se example of the force of your poetry.
You open windows, blow energy and dishevel the traditional perceptions of the world we have. You also see through the veils we use to hide, and you decipher the most intimate side in the human beings.
For you, poetry defies time and space and the last sentence is a proof, thought- provoking, challenging the expected, competing with the unexpected, an ever-renewed surprise that your readers wait for.
I have loved the affectionate direct address of the narrator to an unidentified, mysterious "you".
I have of course liked the visual atmosphere of the poem, and as I was reading it, I was building a mental image of this intimate scene that my camera would have loved to photograph.
Beautiful.
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Sushama Karnik
You always find a unique, novel angle to read/enter into a text and what you find reveals some aspect/meaning that would have gone unnoticed not only by the reader but also by the writer. Your skills as a photographer help you there.
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Françoise Dhulesia
Sushama Karnik ... in so far as I do not distort the original meaning of yours.
Your comment interrogates me: what is the "role" of persons like me who "take possession" of the text, so to speak?
I remain extremely humble when I comment, and always respect the beauty of the text. What I write are not comments but expressions that I immediately submerge my mind and I am like surfing on the text with you.
I like this conversation.
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Sushama Karnik
Your comments help me understand a lot about writing, reading and constructive criticism. Your position as reader is unassuming, unbiased not that of the academia. I truly have come to understand the power of heuristic criticism. It leads not only the readers but also the writer to enter into the text in several different ways. You are not the typical reader/critic with preconceived notions. I personally come to receive a lot of understanding of the reader-writer relationship.
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